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Your absence

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Literature Text

It is said that absence makes the heart grow fonder
But there is another side to absence
It is the pain of you not being there
The void left by you not being here
Is like the stab of a cold winter night
In your absence the sunlight loses its warmth
The moonlight looses its beauty
The flowers lose their smell
The song birds lose their sweet voice
Their beauty is nothing but a faint reflection of your beauty
In your absence these are nothing but empty mirrors
Where are you,come back
Please come back
Ok guys my first poetry.So I have a number of questions I want to ask.

1>Is the writing grammatically sound?
2>Is the any way I could have structured the poem better?
3>Does the poem make you think or make you emotional?
4>Is the ending ok?
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Twyeye's avatar
This is great because I think many of us can relate to this but you have just been able to put these feelings into words. Tres bien!! :D